tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5473819170664052953.post265196501827537217..comments2018-12-08T19:35:48.240-05:00Comments on The Black Squirrel: Telepaths: The Park Slope Conspiracy - 1J. A. Platthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03579737369756389484noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5473819170664052953.post-41577550410643662282010-10-13T23:12:10.282-04:002010-10-13T23:12:10.282-04:00As usual you're churning out the greats. Love...As usual you're churning out the greats. Loved this one '“Sure thing boss,” Larry said placidly, no spark of anger or irritation at the leader, no hurry to defend himself, just driving a little slower with the surface of his mind as smooth as a piece of glass."<br /><br />You are a master of the first person narrative :) This is quite possibly the best telepath story I've read.Les Mackenziehttp://www.lesmackenzie.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5473819170664052953.post-28379562803542133952010-10-02T16:22:05.884-04:002010-10-02T16:22:05.884-04:00@DGP: Oooh... I hadn't thought of it as urban ...@DGP: Oooh... I hadn't thought of it as urban fantasy. That opens up a whole list of agents I didn't think to query. Thanks!<br /><br />@Jonathan Martin: I'm glad 'fives' worked out, that was a tough decision (I didn't want to over-explain). I understand what you mean about the shotguns, her knowledge will make sense as the story unfolds.J. A. Platthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03579737369756389484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5473819170664052953.post-35648584513221233392010-10-02T15:20:42.018-04:002010-10-02T15:20:42.018-04:00I enjoyed it. I really liked the "fives"...I enjoyed it. I really liked the "fives" although it took me a second to realize what the slang was, but not long enough to get me out of the story.<br /><br />One comment, "carrying illegally modified shotguns." This is being told from the viewpoint of your main character, and I never got a sense of how she knew they were illegally modified. I hope that makes sense.Jonathan Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14841202262555830312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5473819170664052953.post-56642735774433907782010-10-02T10:16:12.041-04:002010-10-02T10:16:12.041-04:00I love your world - it gives me hope for "urb...I love your world - it gives me hope for "urban fantasy" as being something other than demon slayers with back tattoos :)Monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09572451338701571550noreply@blogger.com