tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5473819170664052953.post1750214085151340822..comments2018-12-08T19:35:48.240-05:00Comments on The Black Squirrel: Telepaths: The Park Slope Conspiracy - 10J. A. Platthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03579737369756389484noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5473819170664052953.post-32079699577675857722010-12-11T16:35:06.525-05:002010-12-11T16:35:06.525-05:00I like the way you have the conference and the lev...I like the way you have the conference and the level of fear/tension about the block, it is very well done.<br /><br />Blogger strikes again and changes the font of your last paragraph :).<br /><br />I also like how this is all playing out.<br /><br />My main concern at this point in time, and it may be because it is coming out episodic, is that it is hard to keep the characters straight and i don't think the POV is helping with that. Don't get me wrong, what you are doing works, but whereas in a book, it might be a matter of 15 minutes/an hour/a day between reading the chapters and following the characters, this is weeks between seeing the same characters again.<br /><br />I will have to revisit this thought after I have access to the whole story.Jonathan Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14841202262555830312noreply@blogger.com